Saturday, August 1, 2009

Do Something!

...I started feeling that special urge to do something! Anything! The bravery built up in me as I inched closer to the edge of the harbor. I had to do this before it was too late! It was necessary! So I slid even farther…
And let myself fall.
My stomach lurched. For countless seconds, I hung in midair, ready to climb back up. And then it came. Like cold cement, I slapped through the cool water. My eyes burned and I shut them as fast as I could. My skin shriveled. It was so cold!! I felt as numb as stone and for seconds, I could not move. I was sure my body was swept away when I fell and all was left was my lifeless spirit. The energy was gone and I could not feel my legs. My mind was frozen in great confusion until it finally snapped back to reality...

4 comments:

  1. Hi Rachel. Good writing! If you can get it, you should buy Mark Tredinnick's book called "Writing Well." ---Pastor Weber

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  2. Hey Rachel

    I thought that was really good. I really liked it.

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  3. Very very good writing!!! nice descriptive and intricate word choices!! cant wait to see the published book!!! :) -Amber

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